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Pokemon adventures 9 - Problems in Pewter City
« on: June 20, 2013, 05:00:02 am »

***After there adventures in Viridian Forest The Trio are Finally at Pewter***

Damn it Orange why did you have to keep me awake all night telling me the stories about the Bilby - [Mio]


I dont know about you Mio but i kind of found the story amusing, But what was amusing was seeing Orange Piss his pants. - [Ali]


Shut up you guys. you know the Bilby is real and that he will kidnap us all someday. - [Orange]


Yeeeee sureeeeee, Just like how the Boogie monster is real and how count crochular will one day give us all boners... Please all that stuff is just fake. - [Ali]


Hey look i see pewter city right up ahead. - [Mio]


Awesome..... I can finally go get something to eat and challenge the gym. - [Orange]


Well let me check the pokedex for some info on the gym - [Ali]


*** Pewter City - Home to the Kanto's Museum, Pewter Police and also home to the Worlds most Douchest Gymleader******* Pewter Gymleader - Hobo4chompy****** No more Data on Hobo4chompy is Recorded. - [Pokedex]



Wow cant believe it...... The pokedex is actually helpful for once. - [Orange]


*** Recalculating Data *** Orange - There is not much Info on this boy except that he wets the bed mostly everyday in his life and he is in love with........ - [Orange]

***Orange closes the Pokedex before it says anymore***

Sooooooo Orange..... Whats this about you wetting the bed. - [Mio]
Nothing Nothing just forget everything about what the pokedex said - [Orange]

I also do remember the pokedex saying something about you liking someone who is it? - [Mio]

ITS NO ONE NOW FORGET ABOUT IT - [Orange]

Ummmmmm...... Ow look there is Pewter City, Come on lets go get something to eat.

***As The Gang heads down the hill to Pewter City, They run into a little detour***

Im sorry kids, But pewter city is closed right now - [Pewter Police 1]

Why whats happened to pewter - [Ali]

Well you see there is a Organisation called...... - [Pewter Police 1]

*** Out of nowhere they hear a Loud Voice***

Rookie STOP....... You know better then to tell kids about classified information- [Stranger]

Sorry sheriff i was just telling these 3 kids that pewter city was blocked until further notice - [Pewter Police 1]

Ok fine dont worry about that now..... Tell me kids what are your names. - [Sheriff]

Im Orange - [Orange]
Im Ali - [Ali]
Im Mio - [Mio]

Well Nice to meet you kids, My name is Sharkfin and im the Sheriff of the Pewter Police force. - [Sheriff Sharkfin]

Pewter Police force ??? What is that - [Mio, Ali, Orange]

Pewter police force is a Police force that i have created to make sure that not only pewter. but the whole of kanto is safe. - [Sherrif Shark]

That must take alot of time and effort - [Mio]

Well of course crime doesnt solve itself - [Sherrif sharkfin]
Now there is a path just around this corner that will take you to Mount moon...... I want you to take that path and leave pewter for the time being, - [Sherrif Sharkfin]


Why ? - [Ali]


Dont ask me questions .... All you should be worried about are your lives, Now take that path and leave. If you don't we will be forced to place you under arrest - [Sherrif Shark]


Ok Ok we get it we will be leaving now - [Orange]


***BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM***

Arceus  dammit why now - [Sherrif Sharkfin]
Rookie keep an eye on these guys, If they what so ever as move, you have the right to kill them on the spot. Im gonna go and investigate as to what that explosion was. - [Sheriff Sharkfin]

Yes sir....... Ok Kids get on the ground or i will be forced to use my pokemon to harm you - [Pewter Police 1]

***Lucario Use Aura Punch*** - ***Aura Punch hits the Pewter Policemen and knocks him out***

W..who are you - [Ali, Mio and Orange]

That doesnt matter now. What matters now is that Pewter city needs you. Go in and save everyone - [Masked Man

]Thank you very much But Who are you - [Orange]

I am a Nobody...... and thats all you need to know for now, Now farewell. - [Masked Man]

***As the last words were ushered the Masked man Disappeared into thin air***

What just happened - [Ali]

I dont know but we got to catch up to the sheriff. - [Mio]

Come on lets get going - [Orange]

***As The Trio Leaves the entry of Pewter city and adventure into the city Who knows what challenges they will face***

Thank you for reading Pokemon adventures 9 i have changed the writing text and hopefully gonna keep it this way. Please do comment what i should do better or what is really good
« Last Edit: June 20, 2013, 05:17:25 am by hobo4chompy »



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Re: Pokemon adventures 9 - Problems in Pewter City
« Reply #1 on: June 20, 2013, 05:14:21 am »
You need to make it more readable >.<

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Re: Pokemon adventures 9 - Problems in Pewter City
« Reply #2 on: June 20, 2013, 06:52:21 am »
Yayayayay! I'm in it :D


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Re: Pokemon adventures 9 - Problems in Pewter City
« Reply #3 on: June 20, 2013, 07:40:31 am »
Lol thanks for the feed back xD



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Re: Pokemon adventures 9 - Problems in Pewter City
« Reply #4 on: June 20, 2013, 12:21:01 pm »
cool story





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Re: Pokemon adventures 9 - Problems in Pewter City
« Reply #5 on: June 20, 2013, 05:49:31 pm »
Thx waffles



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Re: Pokemon adventures 9 - Problems in Pewter City
« Reply #6 on: June 26, 2013, 05:42:07 pm »
This story is great  :banana:

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Re: Pokemon adventures 9 - Problems in Pewter City
« Reply #7 on: June 27, 2013, 01:44:35 am »
Thanks SnowBro appreciate it  :D